I think to myself why me why me.
I’m only a freshman in high school. I should not be the only freshmen on the
team. I know I’m good but that good? Coach must think I have a lot of potential
if I’m going to be the starting goalie for the next four years. Four weeks
later I’m about to have my first game of the season we are playing Oak hill
high school there the best team in the state of Oregon. I do not want to let
coach down but Oak hill is one of the premier high school’s for lacrosse in the
country.
It’s the start of the last quarter we are up by one I just have to make a few saves and we will have are first win of the season all on me I can’t get too excited they can some times score at will. Lucky for me we have one of the greatest defenses in the state and in country. Ten minutes goes bye with out any shots on goal there’s only five minuets ‘oh no fast brake three on two I have to make the save for me and my team I do. There are only two minuets left in the until I win. Yes the games over and we have are first win on the first game of the year so that means were off to a good start 1-0.
I think to my self what’s next 10-0 okay Mark I say in my head I cant get to confident something could happen to me or my team. My friend Johnny walks up to me he is a senior and a caption he ask if I want to go to a party with him its at this other kid on are teams house I say yes what the hell I should enjoy my self. Okay the party's at six so I have two hours to get ready Johnny coming to get .I’m ready right when six roles around okay here's Johnny. We hit up taco bell on the way ,we role up and I see won of the biggest houses ever the kid that live here is frank.
So me and Johnny walk in together there's this one girl that say hi to me she is really hot. so I start talking to her and we here a knock at the door in the police they have come brake up the party so everyone goes crazy and starts running out every which way. The police arrest me I guess that I was under the influence. I think that bs because I have never drank I’m not stupid. I guess kids on my team are so I’m going to get in trouble for what they did but I guess it’s my fault to for going to a party were there was drinking happening I just hope coach does not find out .
One week latter I’m suspend for the next nine games witch really sucks. My team has a 6-3 record with the other goalie not bad I think I have to get my starting spot back. So I start to practicing with other kids on my team they shoot on me. Okay after nine weeks of practice with the other kids on my team I have gotten to the best lacrosse shape ever.
I’m ready for this practice I have to show my team they can count on me for the hole year and in the playoffs I need to play consistent which the other goalie can not seem to do. That good for me I have two hours left in the day and practice right after it’s almost like I'm counting every second in my head. Okay schools over now I'm out to prove something I’m on a mission and I do it so good. I going to the starting goalie for my team I can feel it. Okay we have a last game coming up until the playoff start we are going to win it all. I mean a state championship the biggest of them kids sometimes never get to play in them its a grate thing if you do.
Okay are last game is over and its the start of the playoff we have a six seed out of sixteen teams which is not that bad seeing how I missed nine out of are eleven games. Which were both wins for the record. I think we can do its, are first games against the twelfth seed. I think It looks good the team we are playing was team played in the last game we won 11 to 2 it was an easy win what do you know we beat them again 11 to 2.
Here comes the next round we are playing the fourth seed who was won of are lose but they have not seen me yet so they do not know what there dealing with. I hope to beat them so we can go to the championship.Oh yeah we are going to the championship your never going to guess who we are playing are rivals Oakhill we beat them the first game but we got luck on are side.
It’s the start of the last quarter we are up by one I just have to make a few saves and we will have are first win of the season all on me I can’t get too excited they can some times score at will. Lucky for me we have one of the greatest defenses in the state and in country. Ten minutes goes bye with out any shots on goal there’s only five minuets ‘oh no fast brake three on two I have to make the save for me and my team I do. There are only two minuets left in the until I win. Yes the games over and we have are first win on the first game of the year so that means were off to a good start 1-0.
I think to my self what’s next 10-0 okay Mark I say in my head I cant get to confident something could happen to me or my team. My friend Johnny walks up to me he is a senior and a caption he ask if I want to go to a party with him its at this other kid on are teams house I say yes what the hell I should enjoy my self. Okay the party's at six so I have two hours to get ready Johnny coming to get .I’m ready right when six roles around okay here's Johnny. We hit up taco bell on the way ,we role up and I see won of the biggest houses ever the kid that live here is frank.
So me and Johnny walk in together there's this one girl that say hi to me she is really hot. so I start talking to her and we here a knock at the door in the police they have come brake up the party so everyone goes crazy and starts running out every which way. The police arrest me I guess that I was under the influence. I think that bs because I have never drank I’m not stupid. I guess kids on my team are so I’m going to get in trouble for what they did but I guess it’s my fault to for going to a party were there was drinking happening I just hope coach does not find out .
One week latter I’m suspend for the next nine games witch really sucks. My team has a 6-3 record with the other goalie not bad I think I have to get my starting spot back. So I start to practicing with other kids on my team they shoot on me. Okay after nine weeks of practice with the other kids on my team I have gotten to the best lacrosse shape ever.
I’m ready for this practice I have to show my team they can count on me for the hole year and in the playoffs I need to play consistent which the other goalie can not seem to do. That good for me I have two hours left in the day and practice right after it’s almost like I'm counting every second in my head. Okay schools over now I'm out to prove something I’m on a mission and I do it so good. I going to the starting goalie for my team I can feel it. Okay we have a last game coming up until the playoff start we are going to win it all. I mean a state championship the biggest of them kids sometimes never get to play in them its a grate thing if you do.
Okay are last game is over and its the start of the playoff we have a six seed out of sixteen teams which is not that bad seeing how I missed nine out of are eleven games. Which were both wins for the record. I think we can do its, are first games against the twelfth seed. I think It looks good the team we are playing was team played in the last game we won 11 to 2 it was an easy win what do you know we beat them again 11 to 2.
Here comes the next round we are playing the fourth seed who was won of are lose but they have not seen me yet so they do not know what there dealing with. I hope to beat them so we can go to the championship.Oh yeah we are going to the championship your never going to guess who we are playing are rivals Oakhill we beat them the first game but we got luck on are side.
It’s the championships we have to win it’s the most important game I
have ever played in my life for any sport. We have to win and we did, we won with the final score 11-10 the game ended in the second overtime that means were state
champion it the greatest day of my life.
1. The conflict of the story was that your main character went to a party and you got arrested for being a by stander. The conflict was external. IT was resolved with you get suspended for 9 games.
ReplyDelete2. The protagonists works really hard at practicing and never giving up.He learns to not go to party's.
3. My favorite part was when you explained how you went to the party and you saw a hot girl."So me and Johnny walk in together there's this one girl that say hi to me she is really hot. so I start talking to her and we here a knock at the door in the police they have come brake up the party so everyone goes crazy and starts running out every which way."
4.The best quality of the story is the whole topic. I liked that you loved lacrosse and that you were only a freshman.
5. The storys theme is to always practice and work your hardest.
6. I think you should definitly work on spelling and grammar and re-read it over to see if it makes sense.